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Progressive Sonnet  - in just autumn
Reply #1 - Nov 14th, 2007 at 7:37am
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Note: A mind/word game poem by and for Norm -- A Progressive Sonnet utilizing the famous ee cummings poem in just- as the catapult allusion (see below).

in just fall

autumn's in just
though leaves do dance
but winter's gusts
allow no chance
(perchance there are a few)
for marbles and hopscotch
what will edbetty do
but play grownup and watch
watching out they use protection
from jack frost's cold that's cumming soon
only spring brings reserection
and limp old men who sell baloons
     the potent storm, the snow, the cold, the squall
     are all brought up this season in just fall.

     
in just-

    in Just-
spring       when the world is mud-
luscious the little
lame baloonman 

whistles       far       and wee 

and eddieandbill come
running from marbles and
piracies and it's
spring 

when the world is puddle-wonderful 

the queer
old baloonman whistles
far       and         wee
and bettyandisbel come dancing 

from hop-scotch and jump-rope and 

it's
spring
and 

      the 

              goat-footed

baloonMan       whistles
far
and
wee 

>>> e.e. cummings
  
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Progressive Sonnet ~ FOM Nov 07
Nov 5th, 2007 at 4:28pm
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The FORM-of-the-MONTH for November is (for now, at least) called:

Progressive Sonnet

Progressive Sonnet is the tentative name for a 'form' that Norm Pollock (Normpo) introduced to us this month, without offering the parameters.  Since he did that, I both guessed at them and then 'expanded' it, both offering the name 'Progressive Sonnet' and expanding its parameters.  So, as a work-in-progress, let me 'define' the form as follows:

1.  It has 14 lines with any of the standard rhyme schemes of any of the varieties of sonnets.

2.  The metrical pattern may have any EVEN number of syllables, but the number of syllables increases / decreases by 2 in succeeding sections or lines following some kind of pattern.

3.  A word or words from the end of lines 4 and 8 (and 12, if you choose) is/are repeated in some fashion at the beginning of lines 5 and 9 (and 13, if you choose) respectively.

4.  Use your imagination! [ Rule 4 may later be eliminated.  Lips Sealed ]

Here are Norm's first two (the original, pure version) followed by three of mine:

Goodby'd - Hello'd

With love goodby'd,
(and rightly so),
as time denied
that love to grow

we grew apart, of course,
on paths that never crossed
as if some unknown force
kept hiding what we'd tossed.

But tossing made it better now
'cause youth would never comprehend
the depth of feeling...to know how
to equate beginnings to the end.

     Those hollow years, upon us they bestowed
     all we live here ...our love has been hello'd.


© Norman S. Pollack


He's "Just Daniel"

He writes so well
this man of wit;
with head not swelled
this man has writ

with writing skills so keen
in every form we'd name;
with plays on words not seen
nor penned with greater fame.

More famous bards have made their marks
And scribbled down their pithy verse;
but on this train where he embarked,
the only way to reimburse

     the guy for all the smiles he has brought
     I say, "Your efforts, friend are not for naught!


© Norman S. Pollack


progressive son etude
 
I tend in form  
to find my wit --  
while 'neath the Norm...  
my aim's legit:  
 
legitimately paint  
inside faint numbered lines  
while trying not to taint  
traditions long-defined...  
 
but long-confined, leap from the box  
and scrawl out mots upon a wall;  
they fall outside what's orthodox  
or seem to make no sense at all.  
 
Yet when the ink is dry, it's sometimes odd  
how evenly they flow, however flawed.  

 
© MLee Dickens'son 01 Nov 2007  
as my first ‘progressive sonnet’



Beneath a Veil

Beneath a veil
of tears I live,
so if I start to wail
I hope you will forgive…

for given as I am to loose the pain,
please look upon me not as vile.
My happiness at last will come again
when once I’ve let my feelings talk a while.

A while ago I may have thought it evil to
allow emotions out; I had to be a man,
and Levis men don’t cry.  I struggled hard ‘til I could screw
my upper lip and jaw to form a nondescript deadpan.

But now I see it’s almost vile to veil life’s painful truths behind
an evil, smiling mask… live in the open; what I seek, I’ll find.


© MLee Dickens'son 01 Nov 2007
plus-progressive anagram sonnet


Life to Dry Bones

Dry bones
bleached in the sun...
life gone, detached, alone
strewn in the valley...  not a one —
to — one relationship... sinew and flesh
discarded without hope to taste of life, nor hear
the Voice Who calls.  We stir and gather nonetheless...
all ears, though yet His purpose is not clear.…
It’s clear we have no life; He breathes...
Voila!  We feel the Light;
we see that He’s
the Height
of all there is and ever will be here.
We rise with Him; He whispers, “Child, draw near.”


© MLee Dickens'son 04 Nov 2007
meditation on Ezekiel 37
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