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Re: Sam's amorous onomatopoeia (revision 03/28/07)
Reply #5 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Thank you again Just_Daniel.

Thank you nas, for a critique so in depth.

Thank you D. Allen Jenkins for motivating me to try to improve my clarity.

The definitions only slightly add cartoon connotation to the link between the historical wars and the Biblical prophecies written in the end quotes of each stanza: (see Bible book of Daniel 11:24, 28-31)

Maybe I'm trying to do too much??? dwgpoet
  
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Re: Sam's amorous onomatopoeia
Reply #4 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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I'm afraid I must agree with the others on this; I am left scratching my head at the import and means of this effort...especially the lexiconic elements of the piece.  ??? This is exacerbated by the fact that several of the parenthetical clarifications do not seem to correspond to their object, i.e. Amenorrhea (honor, propriety) and, limbic (nose brain). 

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Chorea (spasmodic nervous blitzkrieg in a chorus of facial and limbic (nose brain) movements[b][)]
 

Please explain, as my oft obtrusive dimness tends to preclude me having a clue about such things. Embarrassed
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Re: Sam's amorous onomatopoeia
Reply #3 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Hi Dwgpoet

I'm afraid that like Daniel, I'm a bit bemused by this.

What do you mean when you say:

Sam sh** out his.....

It seems strange phraseology to me 

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Sam sh** out his
Amenorrhea (honor, propriety)  <<eh this makes no sense??amenorrhea is lack of periods.  Not something I'd imagine Sam would have a problem with
when he first saw the full moon.
 
Sam sh** out his
fantasia Bahia grass (fancy bizarre roving, unrestricted Amazonian weeds)
when the soccer ball fully hit   
onto the field ending the match   
in a tie.  <<How can hitting a soccer ball onto the field (if playing soccer it should be pitch) end the match in a draw?
 
Sam sh** out his      
Chorea (spasmodic nervous blitzkrieg in a chorus of facial and limbic (nose brain) movements
when the League of Nations ended by a full triple alliance due   
to acrid odor in its olfactory bulb.  <<ended with?
 
Sam sh** out his   
Diarrhea (frequent intestinal evacuations of the green-backed fluid stools)   
when the red red wine of the john’s price failed to unarm <<<I don't understand "the john's price"
the kea (a large dull parrot) which was slashing Sam’s facist back in a blitzkrieg to feed on English kidney fat instead of Russian breast milk.
 
Sam sh** out his
Logorrheic (excessive and often incoherent talkativeness   
or wordiness), Peripeteia (a sudden or unexpected reversal)   
when the panacean (all-healing),   
United Nations formed   
after the Great war to end
all wars had ended. <<too many ends, perhaps ceased
 
Sam sh** out his   
Sangria of Prosopopoeia (speech in which an imaginary or absent person is represented as the personification of the poet)    
      when he had finally become
      Uncle Sam. [b]<<I think it should be "when he finally became Uncle Sam"
  
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Re: Sam's amorous onomatopoeia
Reply #2 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Thank you Daniel for the rapid replies.

I will also wait for others' perspectives.

Your student seeking a mentor,

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Re: Sam's amorous onomatopoeia
Reply #1 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Greetings again...

Although I find a lot of cleverness and education in this display of words, I'm not sure that I understand it all (which is not all that uncommon, by the way, and is not necessarily a criticism of your piece)...

and I'm not sure that I'd view it as a poem...

maybe come kind of modern art display ?

awaiting others' perspective to assist my own dim Light, Daniel  8)
  
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Sam's amorous onomatopoeia (revision 03/28/07)
Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Sam sounded out his

Amenorrhea (absence or suppression of normal) when he first saw the full moon, he vowed, No Forgiveness lest blood spills.

Sam sounded out his

fantasia Bahia (grass, fancy bizarre Roman, unrestricted Amazonian weeds) when football hid in field, ending  right breastless bowmen's match, Blame Christ; Burn the field.

Sam sounded out his          

Chorea (spasmodic nervous blitzkrieg in a chorus of facial and limbic (nose brain) movements) when the League of Nations ended by a acrid odor in SAMs' olfactory bulb; Back to our Land! Our Reich! Seize the Holy Covenant! 

Sam sounded out his
 
Diarrhea (frequent intestinal evacuations of the green-backed fluid stools) when the red red wine, after tea time, failed to unarm the kea (a large dull parrot) which was slashing Sam’s facist back in a blitzkrieg to feed on English kidney fat instead of Russian breast milk. Heil, wipe them with (the arms) to remove the constant feature.

Sam sounded out his

Logorrheic (excessive and often incoherent talkativeness or wordiness), Peripeteia (a sudden or unexpected reversal) when the panacean (all-healing), United Nations formed after the Great war to end all wars had ended; smooth words: show no consideration to gods of old; just fortresses.

Sam sounded out his      

Sangria of Prosopopoeia (speech in which an imaginary or absent person is represented as the personification of the poet)            when he had finally 

become,
                                         Uncle Sam

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(original 03/24/07)


Sam nuts out his
Amenorrhea (honor, propriety) 
when he first saw the full moon.

Sam nuts out his
fantasia Bahia grass (fancy bizarre roving, unrestricted Amazonian weeds)
when the soccer ball fully hit 
onto the field ending the match 
in a tie.

Sam nuts out his          
Chorea (spasmodic nervous blitzkrieg in a chorus of facial and limbic (nose brain) movements
when the League of Nations ended by a full triple alliance due 
to acrid odor in its olfactory bulb.

Sam nuts out his 
Diarrhea (frequent intestinal evacuations of the green-backed fluid stools) 
     when the red red wine of the john’s price failed to unarm the kea (a large dull parrot) which was slashing Sam’s facist back in a blitzkrieg to feed on English kidney fat instead of Russian breast milk.

Sam nuts out his
Logorrheic (excessive and often incoherent talkativeness 
or wordiness), Peripeteia (a sudden or unexpected reversal) 
when the panacean (all-healing), 
United Nations formed 
after the Great war to end
all wars had ended.

Sam nuts out his       
Sangria of Prosopopoeia (speech in which an imaginary or absent person is represented as the personification of the poet)             
                                         when he had finally become
                                         Uncle Sam.
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