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Re: Shades of Night (or 'neath the petals)
Reply #3 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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dericlee wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
[mumbles]

Audio...ever'body wants audio.  why the hell did I buy a mic that needs batteries?!  Oughta be standin' on a darn corner with a sign "Will work for "AAA" cells"...

I'll keep workin on that, My Cowgal lost on the Northern Coasts!  (Ain't you gettin' cold or nothin', up thar, yet?) 

Aren't I getting cold. . .aren't I getting cold. . .I'm frozen. . .completely frozen. . .especially today with the wind gusting the way it is. . .and my driveway an ice skating rink. . .spring's coming, though. . .and we were actually lucky for the most part this winter.

Vicki sends her love.  I send my love.

And please send my love to Vicki in return. . .if she's able. . .hopefully she can pop in again a time or two.

Meanwhile, I left somethin' in OnTrack that maybe won't be so supposedly bullet-proof as this'n.

Alrighty. . .I'll check that out. . .though it's doubtful I'll find much to pick on there either.  lolol  But the reading is always a beautiful excercise.

~Ren~

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Re: Shades of Night (or 'neath the petals)
Reply #2 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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[mumbles]

Audio...ever'body wants audio.  why the hell did I buy a mic that needs batteries?!  Oughta be standin' on a darn corner with a sign "Will work for "AAA" cells"...

I'll keep workin on that, My Cowgal lost on the Northern Coasts!  (Ain't you gettin' cold or nothin', up thar, yet?) 

Vicki sends her love.  I send my love.

Meanwhile, I left somethin' in OnTrack that maybe won't be so supposedly bullet-proof as this'n.
  
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Re: Shades of Night (or 'neath the petals)
Reply #1 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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What in tarnation do you think I could say about this, Cowboy. . .

other than when reading this aloud, over and over again, as I have. . .that my tongue has not melted over the words as it does with this. . .in a long time.

I am carried far away. . .and made very small. . .so that I can see the world. . .as it is written here. . .

And only because I am "forced" by the notice at the door. . .lolol. . .will I even offer the one very small nit that I might consider. . .here:

Shaking off, at last, the reverie 
that trapped me, like a web, and held me staring, nightspellbound 
beneath this fragile nightshade that's my daybed's canopy here, I'm feeling a need for a mark of punctuation. . .
I stir and move across the verdure of my deep surround. 

Now. . .you could put audio with this. . .I'm sure we'd all love to hear you read it. . .

~Ren~


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Shades of Night (or 'neath the petals)
Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Well, it survived On Track well enough...let's see how it does in the shredder.  Have at it, y'all.


My breath enfolded by the mists that float on twilight's chill,
I wake to velvet crimsons deep'ning into violet hues
that soften my harsh gaze.  The cool caress that wakes my will
makes pebbles in my flesh and takes my mood to deeper blues
in this pale moonglow. Shaking off, at last, the reverie
that trapped me, like a web, and held me staring, nightspellbound
beneath this fragile nightshade that's my daybed's canopy,
I stir and move across the verdure of my deep surround.
My steps into black shadows veer as Elder Trees arise
about my path.  Outside, the silver gleams on points of dew
collecting as pale sapphires (that their petal-hosts will prize
until the sunrise).  Onward--scents of lavender and rue 
still beckon to my senses.  Here!  The dance is nigh begun!
The Folk of Mist and Night hold court amid the Brothers Eild
who, somber in their silence, watch as sportive music's spun
on instruments that mortal man may never hear nor wield!
Too short, the night! Too soon the sky shifts onto pearly gray!
Too quickly does my drowse enfold and speed me to my bed!
Too soft, my pillow; dreams too fleet for thought to long abay...
the moss beneath the Nightshade murmurs sweet beneath my head
until the morrow's eve.



(c) MMVII eric lee
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