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Reply #3 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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duetsdove wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
First of all. ..how could I not adore a work inspired by my absolute favourite poem -- The Road Not Taken. . .Frost (not of the winter type) does certainly inspire. . .and I'd say that I may see Stopping by Woods as well. . .perhaps.

I know I've done two take-offs from Stopping by Woods, maybe three... but I didn't really think of that one with this... I just took off diverging from the two roads... of rhyming meter and free verse... and with a little rebellions humor for good measure ~ which I have a feeling he might have chuckled with me about.

and what an interesting form. . .we have what I thought was going to be a sonnet. . .which stops after the third quatrain. . .and the couplet become a couplet of different forms. . .haiku and cinquain. . .

quite so! Correct!

This is so cool, Daniel. . .I'm going to read it over a few more times. . .though I'm sure I'll have little to offer structure-wise. . .

Enjoyed!  ~Rene~

Please don't sell yourself short re structrue.  You're right up there with the best of them... when you venture into it!  I'll be happy to have you share any impressions you have of this one after you've done those further readings.

deLighting that you've shared so far, Daniel  8)
  
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The Error Road Taken

I took a single road that split
in two directions; all at once
I found myself where now I sit
with torn hamstrings and a dunce
hat sitting atop my head.

© D. Allen Jenkins

Treading lightly,

Doug
  
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First of all. ..how could I not adore a work inspired by my absolute favourite poem -- The Road Not Taken. . .Frost (not of the winter type) does certainly inspire. . .and I'd say that I may see Stopping by Woods as well. . .perhaps.

and what an interesting form. . .we have what I thought was going to be a sonnet. . .which stops after the third quatrain. . .and the couplet become a couplet of different forms. . .haiku and cinquain. . .

This is so cool, Daniel. . .I'm going to read it over a few more times. . .though I'm sure I'll have little to offer structure-wise. . .

Enjoyed!

~Rene~
  
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Erode... Naught Taken
Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Erode... Naught Taken

I have walked two roads as I’ve scribbled verse;
they converge as one in yon yellowed wood.
If I’d chosen the other, would I be the worse?
Have I looked down the one as far as I could?
I’d spent precious time in the undergrowth
of the wanderlust path, and I got nowhere,
so I reasoned I’d rhyme, taking something of both
to discover perchance what each sought to share.
Some traveler friends bid farewell as I strode,
but cautiously, marching a shadowy path
to somewhere or other past empty abodes —
encountered cold shoulders… occasional wrath.

passers-by poked fun
throughout a fallen winter;
still life sprang anew

two trails
diverged from woods
in pungent yellow streams;
so I set a new course through trees
relieved


© MLee Dickens’son 09 Feb 2006


a musing from Robert Frost's 

The Road Not Taken
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