I can't top yer rhyrme.
I'm the beginner,
just wastin' yer time;
there ain't no winner.

I'm no crit but l like norms idead on re-leaved. It fits the picture.

Normpo wrote on Jan 1^st, 1970 at 12:00am:

Take note what ya see here, young Perse:
Norm struggles a bit with 'is verse;
'is footwork needs fixin'
when 'e's 'ere a-mixin'
wi' Limericks.  He could do worse.

Thank you for your observations, Norm... 

and I'd be pleased to get the info!

deLighting in the sharing, Daniel  8)

Perse,

Where there's a Doug and a Dan
You'll know for a fact that they can
With their words they amaze
They both turn a phrase
Now we're off to the races again.

Norm

Daniel,

I will come back to this for crit but I have one small observation and one serious suggestion:

1) I almost read that last line re-leaved"

2) I have a few poems accepted in a rather odd publication called "The Nuthouse". They don't pay in cash but in a subscription -- at least it adds to my writing resume LOL. I think this poem is a slam-dunk to get accepted --- IMHO of course.  If you want the information let me know and I'll PM it to you.

Norm

no offense intended
where there's a doug there's a dan   

sense a war between dan and doug
lost in the posts upon this train
a weaker man would grab the plug 
and stop this madness in my brain

yes, not quite good but enjoying the thoughts anyway